On 02/17/2016 06:01 PM, Slimer wrote:


I snipped it because your level of English was fairly embarrassing as
was the suggestion that it was somehow a poem.





Ok I'll give you another one to critique:





Not a good day.
It sticks out like a sore thumb:
My unkempt shirt.
The ringing in my head.
My hair,
Uncombed.

It sticks out like a sore thumb:
My hangover.
The newspaper headlines,
Bearing foul news.
The dented wreak.

It sticks out like a sore thumb:
My ill fitting job.
The grizzled dog.
A whole city now decayed
And polluted.

It sticks out like a sore thumb:
Everything in my life.
Ironically all,
Save my sore thumb,
Which I’ve bandaged tightly.